I WILL FEEL TOMORROW

Today is only Wednesday, but what the heck.  I have my story of 100 words ready for Friday Fictioneers.  I might as well put it up for you to see.  We are hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, the lady who is addicted to purple.  Won’t you come in, sit awhile and read our stories.  Better yet, join us. 

 PHOTO PROMPT Copyright – Marie Gail Stratford


PHOTO PROMPT Copyright – Marie Gail Stratford

A hundred bottles on the wall. 

A hundred bottles on the wall.

The refrain played over and over in her head.  She saw a hundred green eyes winking at her, mocking her.

The dancers danced their dance on stage.  The audience clapped and cheered in the celebration of the moment, in the  appreciation of skillful maneuvers and flamboyant robes. 

She sat silent, watching, not feeling.  Not knowing how to feel. She will feel tomorrow.

Meanwhile, the music played, hips swayed and feet moved.  Flashbulbs went off.  Toasts were made.

She sat, silent and unobserved or so she thought.  Tomorrow, tomorrow…..

About hafong

Hello! My name is (Leung) Hafong alias Lily Leung. You always say the last name first….that is the Chinese way. That is my partner lurking behind me. Since this is my blog, I won’t mention his name. But this is a rather cool picture. You see me and yet you don’t…sort of the way I feel about myself most of my life. So this blog is a self-exploration, an archeology dig of some sort. My tools…..words of a thousand or so at a sitting. I will try for that.
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20 Responses to I WILL FEEL TOMORROW

  1. I found this mystery intriguing.. I like the hints you are throwing in.. like felling tomorrow and not knowing she’s observed…

  2. I don’t really know what’s going on, but it seems that something bad has happened and she’s trying to recover from it while everyone else is celebrating and life goes on.

    You have two tenses here, the past (in the first paragraphs before “She sits…”) and the present (from there on.) You should use one or the other, so you could “The refrain plays”, “She sees”, and so on. Or you could used “She sat”, “music played” and so on. I hope this is helpful.

    janet

  3. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Hafong,

    Let you husband edit. Who knows, after a while he’ll be submitting stories too. Good job.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  4. Dear Lily,

    Sounds like she had one bottle too many, If that’s the case she’s bound to feel tomorrow. 😉 Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  5. The poor thing seems very alone, neglected. Hope tomorrow brings better.

  6. I really like this… it could go either way… she could do something really bad or maybe something really good! Nice job.

  7. plaridel says:

    it looks like a scene from a strip club, but i’m not really sure. 🙂

  8. I hope that whatever she feels – it’s a good thing.

  9. So intriguing, Lily. I can’t wait to read more. LHN

  10. Lily, To me also it sounds like she’s had some sort of shock and can’t fully feel things as yet. It sounds hopeful that she’ll recover.Good and well written story. I could feel how much she felt apart from the others. 🙂 —Susan

  11. rgayer55 says:

    A very open-ended story, Lily. It leaves a lot to the imagination. Maybe I’ll figure it out–tomorrow.

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