It’s Friday and time for fiction of 100 words, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
PHOTO PROMPT Copyright-Ted Strutz
She looked at the instruments lined up on the tray. They glistened in the light. How sharp their ends look! She quivered in the chair. Her mouth was dry. There was no need for paper apron around her neck.
She saw the wire mesh on the window. Beyond her boardinghouse the ferry sat. It will leave without her. She choked back a sob. The tears trickled down her face. She wiped them with the apron. She needed it after all.
He walked in, gloved and masked, and sat in front of her. She grabbed his hand.
“Will you hurt me?”
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This was scary.. I feel it’s not just a dentist here..
Maybe! I don’t even know myself. 🙂
I’m wondering if he’s some sort of serial dentist.. Maybe she’s asking to be hurt. You wouldn’t catch me going to a dentist who conceals himself. Well done. Mysterious. Lucy
Mysteries & scary stuff are so much fun! 🙂
Hmmm. This sounds pretty scary to me…
Thanks for reading, Sandra!
Dear Lily,
This feels like a small part of a much longer, ominous story. I have the feeling this is no ordinary dental checkup. Bucekt dibe,
Shalom,
Rochelle
That’s supposed to read “Nicely done.” Not sure why my mind and fingers weren’t connecting.
No worries, Rochelle. It was after all Friday the 13th! 🙂
Rochelle, I thought maybe you were trying out a new language!
I really love your imagery in the first paragraph, and the conclusion is so creepy. Well done.
Thanks so much!
They really shouldn’t mask up before they enter the room!
Yes, they can scare you that way.
She wants to be hurt! Run, dentist, run.
Hahahaha!
Lily, I’m not exactly sure what’s going on there, but it’s definitely creepy.
It stands well alone, but would be a great beginning for a longer story. Well written. 🙂 —Susan
Thank you Susan! And thanks for the info about the other forum. I would like to write longer pieces a little later. I’m attention deficit. 🙂
Lily
Your short sentences add to the suspense in this intriguing, ambiguous and mysterious tale, which raises more questions than answers. It is an opening of a bigger tale, or episode within one. I like this. Ann
Thank you for the read and input, Ann. It is very helpful.
Lily
🙂
Dear Lily, I’m scared just thinking about it! Very well done! I don’t know, but I get a distinct feeling that she maybe wants to be hurt? If true – she needs help, but I’m sure he (the dentist) can provide the “hurt” for her. Have a good week! Nan:)
Thanks Nan! I think she does need help!
I find dentists almost as scary as torturers. You captured the feeling very well.
Thank you!
gloved and masked is such a BAD way for a dentist to enter a room. (P.S. watch tense changes within your writing) Great short.
Thanks for the reminder! I have a difficult time with the tense thing and not great with proof-reading. My partner nags me alot about it. 🙂 I’m an impatient writer.