THE DENTIST – Friday Fictioneers

It’s Friday and time for fiction of 100 words, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

PHOTO PROMPT Copyright-Ted Strutz


She looked at the instruments lined up on the tray.  They glistened in the light.  How sharp their ends look!  She quivered in the chair. Her mouth was dry.  There was no need for paper apron around her neck.

She saw the wire mesh on the window.  Beyond her boardinghouse the ferry sat.  It will leave without her.  She choked back a sob. The tears trickled down her face.  She wiped them with the apron. She needed it after all.

He walked in, gloved and masked, and sat in front of her.  She grabbed his hand.

“Will you hurt me?”

27 thoughts on “THE DENTIST – Friday Fictioneers

  1. I’m wondering if he’s some sort of serial dentist.. Maybe she’s asking to be hurt. You wouldn’t catch me going to a dentist who conceals himself. Well done. Mysterious. Lucy

  2. Lily, I’m not exactly sure what’s going on there, but it’s definitely creepy. O_o It stands well alone, but would be a great beginning for a longer story. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

    1. Thank you Susan! And thanks for the info about the other forum. I would like to write longer pieces a little later. I’m attention deficit. 🙂


  3. Your short sentences add to the suspense in this intriguing, ambiguous and mysterious tale, which raises more questions than answers. It is an opening of a bigger tale, or episode within one. I like this. Ann

  4. Dear Lily, I’m scared just thinking about it! Very well done! I don’t know, but I get a distinct feeling that she maybe wants to be hurt? If true – she needs help, but I’m sure he (the dentist) can provide the “hurt” for her. Have a good week! Nan:)

    1. Thanks for the reminder! I have a difficult time with the tense thing and not great with proof-reading. My partner nags me alot about it. 🙂 I’m an impatient writer.

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