It is Friday.  Once again it is time for Friday Fictioneers and our tales from our imaginations.  We are hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields of Addicted to Purple.  Here is my story this week of 100 words.


Photo prompt – Copyright – Dawn Q. Landau

She felt the world on her back, pushing her forward.  Head down, stooping over, she trudged one step at a time.  Her shoes felt like lead.  She was trapped by an invisible wall.

She dared not go too fast, lest she overstepped her boundaries.  One wrong move in any direction could end it all.  She spun around in her tracks, looking for an escape route.

The wind blew the skirt around her legs. She tugged the hat down on her head, clutching the heavy hammer with her other hand.

“Help.”  She whimpered.  Silence rebounded.

“Help!”  She screamed into the void.

About hafong

Hello! My name is (Leung) Hafong alias Lily Leung. You always say the last name first….that is the Chinese way. That is my partner lurking behind me. Since this is my blog, I won’t mention his name. But this is a rather cool picture. You see me and yet you don’t…sort of the way I feel about myself most of my life. So this blog is a self-exploration, an archeology dig of some sort. My tools…..words of a thousand or so at a sitting. I will try for that.
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11 Responses to TRAPPED!

  1. This is a lovely tale of desperation. Love the whispered Help before the screamed one.

  2. Amy Reese says:

    I can feel the despair. I was intrigued by her fearing crossing over this invisible boundary. And what will she do with the hammer? Will it save her or will it doom her? It has a sci-fi feel. Great story!

  3. How strongly you picture here despair.. somehow I see her as blind… lost in the dark with only a staff to find her way..

  4. Her despair is evident. Although I find myself curious as to why she’s there.

  5. Lily, Interesting story with good description. As you say, there could be a longer story there. Many quiestions would be answered and perhaps a ray of hope. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

  6. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Lily, Good story and I do love the last two lines – really creepy good! Nan 🙂

  7. margirene says:

    Invisible walls, boundaries, fear of putting a foot wrong – sounds like life, really. I like that she’s nowhere, because she can be anywhere. And the hammer – she obviously has it for a reason, but doesn’t know how to utilise it. Gripping.

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